If a sentence contains multiple clauses, rewrite the sentence as two or more simpler sentences with fewer clauses in each new sentence.
Tip:
Many clauses are relative clauses. Relative clauses are clauses that begin with that, when, where, which, or who.
Preferred |
Discouraged |
This section describes how to connect the remote console modem to the server. A technical support representative uses the modem to dial in and perform remote maintenance. |
This section describes how to connect the remote console modem to the server, which a technical support representative uses to dial in and perform remote maintenance. |
With the write command, you can download the ports and the settings that you select to a flat file. You can use this file later, such as when you want to use the editor. |
With the write command, you can download the ports and the settings that you select to a flat file for use later, such as when you want to use the editor. |
This program provides a screen that requests a user name and a unique password. The screen does not display the password that you type. |
This program provides a screen that requests a user name and a unique password, which the screen does not display when you type the password. |
When you select Design from the Report menu, you are in the Design Mode. You can see the current report, and you can also edit the report. |
When you select Design from the Report menu, you can still see the current report, but you are now in the Design Mode, from where you can edit the report. |
